Thursday, 4 August 2016

HIDE AND SEEK

Hide And Seek

A musty smell wafts up my nostrils
Footsteps are coming towards me crunching on the grass
The shed door opens with a loud creak
Light rushes into the room blinding me
I shuffle backwards until I hit the wall
Whispers flood the room echoing off the walls
I know they’re close
I know they're gonna find me
Splinters attack my arm and knees
My legs are stiff like wood
My arms are frozen like ice
More whispers flood the room
My hands are trembling like a dog shaking off water
They finally spot me looking me right in the eye
That's it game over.

By Sammi








2 comments:

  1. Hi Ashleigh

    Thanks for your feedback, I will try to put more adjectives in my work too. Tomorrow we have school camp and may play hide and seek or spotlight there.

    From Sammi

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  2. Hi Sammi
    My name is Antonio from Waikowhai primary school and I a in Room 9.
    I really like your poem because it rhymes and I like poems that rhyme.Also did you make this poem by your self? And I like how your poem was about you hiding.
    Also I would like it if you could visit my blog.
    http://wpsantoniom.blogspot.co.nz/

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